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TheRadiantSeraphim
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 Posted: Sun Nov 18, 2007 5:08 pm Post subject: Descriptions. |
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In my writing, I am trying to find a balance of description that gives enough to put a picture in people's mind, but also trying not to go overboard to where I sound too wordy.
Does anyone have any tips on this, or are able to evaluate a chapter of my prose to tell me what they think is wrong, description wise? I am all about following my instinct, and have so far, but I also want to make sure my writing is readable and keeps interest. Once I done that, and satisfied my own personal desires, I moreso achieved my goals. Grammar is not an issue for me unless it disrupts flow.
Thank you for your attention.
Sincerely,
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Shining Star
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RadiantSeraphim,
I'd be glad to read a chapter of your work.
Annie
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| Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 11:09 pm Post subject: |
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Me, too. Can I read a chapter? 
Also, I've learned alot on this particular subject as I can go overboard and therefore lose my readers. My sisters and I like to look at Conan Doyle and Dickens to compare: for example, we noticed that Conan Doyle, in Watson's character, liked to describe the weather too much or what Holmes was doing that was not very interesting at all. But Dickens fully described a beautiful spring day and we felt like we were there, but he didn't do it too much so as to lose our interest. 
OK, enough of my ranting...
-Christy
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TheRadiantSeraphim
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| Posted: Tue Nov 20, 2007 12:14 am Post subject: |
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Thank you! And I was just wondering moreso the advice you had on description, but reading my work to give specifics is a major plus. Thank you again ladies!
And please do not feel rushed. I am going to be busy this week, so I got no time to dwell on wanting attention in the first place. ;-) And I hate to sound like an attention-stealer, too.
I try to actually read everyone's story whenever I can. I sometimes miss some during my busy times, but otherwise try to read the ones that are posted on the page when I submit my own work. Then leave comments. It is just etiquette to me, and I know how much feedback is valuable to someone.
So...if anyone is looking for any specific feedback, please do not be afraid to ask me. I am definitely not an expert, but I will try to give at least some subjective review.
Sincerely,
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TheRadiantSeraphim
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| Posted: Thu Dec 06, 2007 12:15 am Post subject: |
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I been actually experimenting with something in my descriptions.
What I been doing even moreso than before was writing the story through the point of view of each character. Does anyone have thoughts on this and if just focusing on this will help with the descriptions more? Anything else I should consider?
I noticed though a minor contrast between Alysana and Rynquaith's scenes as I did this, but I am not complaining too much right now. We have Alysana the philosopher when she is alone, and Rynquaith the conniver. I think it is a nice touch to add a more personal perspective on everything.
On a note, I have also been expanding my literature collection from the typical fantasy and sci-fi. I been doing somewhat fantasy with paranormal romances, but I also been taking into other kinds of readings, like mystery. I am starting on Silence of the Lambs rather soon. I think inspiration means a lot with description, or else it looks more forced than normal.
Sincerely,
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